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A chōka
Vimalajāti
Whitby, Ontario Veteran
Inspired by @adamcrossley, I decided to post a poem of my own.
Pain without the pained.
Deeds without their doing-man.
Peace, not a one calmed.
Not what is “wanted”, dreamt of.
Instead: peace and calm,
deeds and the fame following,
the ending of pain,
with the lingering of me
to enjoy it: what’s “wanted”.
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(Looked up "chōka; ...hmmm... a multitude of definitions...!)
It's not the strictest chōka! It mostly just has the 5-7-5-7-5-7-5-7-7 syllable structure.
The kireji is meant to fall on "Instead:", my meagre attempt at authenticity
...but that's not even the way they are supposed to work. The "cutting word" is supposed to create a natural pause in the rhythm. Instead, I have a pause at "dreamt of." and a kireji on "Instead:". Alas!