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My poem for school
Love-N-Peace
Veteran
Seven Ages based on the Seven Ages of Man by William Shakespeare. I did the Seven Ages of Evolution...
The Seven Ages of Evolution
By Joe .T. Y
A lightening flash,
A lava gash,
An algae rash,
A polyp stash.
Jellyfish amerge,
Fish say hello,
A backbone is of what they're on the verge,
Then apear corals- blue, green and yellow.
Fish crawl out on land,
But only if it's moist,
Insects grow and become grand,
Into the air the dragonfly's wings a-hoist,
Some amphibians eggs become tougher,
Some amphibians develop scaly skin,
Some become rougher,
Dinosaurs are their next of kin.
The dinosaurs reign,
Through Turassic, Jurassic, Cretacious,
But oh what a pain,
A meteorite came and made them feel nauxious.
Some survived,
They grew feathers and took to the skies,
Mammals took over revived,
Some took to the trees and cut their family ties.
Hominids got to their feet,
They made a fire,
They sat in a seat,
And accused Darwin a lier.
By Joe .T. Y
A lightening flash,
A lava gash,
An algae rash,
A polyp stash.
Jellyfish amerge,
Fish say hello,
A backbone is of what they're on the verge,
Then apear corals- blue, green and yellow.
Fish crawl out on land,
But only if it's moist,
Insects grow and become grand,
Into the air the dragonfly's wings a-hoist,
Some amphibians eggs become tougher,
Some amphibians develop scaly skin,
Some become rougher,
Dinosaurs are their next of kin.
The dinosaurs reign,
Through Turassic, Jurassic, Cretacious,
But oh what a pain,
A meteorite came and made them feel nauxious.
Some survived,
They grew feathers and took to the skies,
Mammals took over revived,
Some took to the trees and cut their family ties.
Hominids got to their feet,
They made a fire,
They sat in a seat,
And accused Darwin a lier.
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Comments
I watched a programme the other day, where scientists were called to a dead beached whale, and performed an autopsy.
That's one big examination! It was amazing to watch them, on this beach, carefully and expertly taking this whale apart to find the cause of death and in doing so, they found the vestigial remains of hind limbs.... the whale, it turns out, is more closely related to a mouse, than it is to any fish..... It used to be a land mammal, about the size of a dog...... I find this mind-boggling.....
Nice poem, I love the bit about Darwin.
I think it's wonderful!
Make sure to check all your spelling before you hand it in.
I'm amazed that a 12 year old wrote it. Just amazed.....:)
You are a wondrous being, little Jellybean.
P.S. If you read it slowly it has more effect.
PPS, English spelling's different in some things like OK/okay, grey/gray ext. But I don't think I can spell nauxious or whatever I wrote, nauseous, that's it
Wow...Maaan , let the windows down
Good work! I wish I could do rhymes in English...
(please don't delete this post again just because I don't like it and think he/she can do much better)
The kid's 12 years old, for goodness' sake.
I think, for a 12-year-old, it's really good stuff.
It's a first attempt at poetry, and he's not read any of any significance.
I think this is not too bad an effort, when that is all considered.
Read my PMs. Take my advice.
Go chill for a while......
You don't have to spread your misery around.
I'd make a comment but then I'd sound like an up-his-own-ass twonk.
HA! I knew it!
Fede, yes, the whale and other aquatic mammals like dolphins are quite unique in that they represent one of the few examples where animals that came out of the oceans to make a home on land actually returned to the sea. At the Smithsonian here in town they've got a full skeleton of a fossil early whale that takes up a good part of the ceiling in one part of the Oceans gallery. You can clearly see the paddles that used to be its rear legs. Cetaceans are fascinating. Did you know that a dolphin's brain is, relative to body size and weight, larger than a human's? Mainly because of all the processing that their sonar requires, but who knows what they are thinking? Too bad we can't view other species as being as valuable (or maybe more) than our own!
Palzang
Palzang
Ok, as you asked, I'm just helping out, ok?
That's it!
Not much at all!
Good going, JB!
Love & Peace
Jellybean
Two can play at that game!
Palzang
You're a darling, Jellybean, but I wasn't really looking forward to correcting the spelling. I'm not a very good teacher.
Speaking of spelling, there should be built-in spell checkers in your browser if you're using Firefox, which you should be because IE just isn't as safe. If not, you can always find nice little spell check programs you can download. I used to use one when I was using a PC. I think it was called TinySpell, or something like that.